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By Request Of Goatslayer: Sci-Fi/Segment 1, And There Be Gods

THeMaCHinE

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This is a new project I am working on. If there is enough interest here, I will publish one or two segments a week. Seriously, let me know if you like it and would like to see future updates.

And There Be Gods
by MACHINE
© 2001 by MACHINE
All Rights Reserved

1.

Space. Blackness and light. A sterile starscape repeating beyond the boundaries of sight.

Entropic calmness. A preternatural and primordial abyss locked eternal in a staunch glacial grip.

The automated long-range service pod sailed the solar winds, navigating the silent vacuum like a phantom — its single-entity payload awaiting activation. It was the last of five. Its four brothers lost to various catastrophes during the course of the long journey from Xia-Xia, the home planet.

Danger surrounded.

The P-24 shock trooper lay still, empty black eyes reflecting the starlight that permeated the pod’s small portal window; a drug-induced haze holding its mind from self-immolation, electrical and cryogenic systems suspending its internal organs and neuromuscular system.

300 solar miles from the red planet’s surface, the LRSD initiated the stealth system. A gelatinous amber substance spurted from multi-directional surface nozzles on the pod’s outside skin. Flowing like mercury, the substance engulfed the pod, cloaking it from the powerful net shield that acted as a mass-intrusion detection and early defense system for the enemy planet.

Too small to be snared in the shield’s glowing energy folds, the LRSD sliced through the shield and proceeded toward the red planet of Troy.

250 solar miles. Eighteen gauge half-inch hypodermics snaked from the recesses of the pod’s medical system, plunging into the shoulders, traps and neck of the shock trooper. Six grams of halotestin, methyltest, amphetamines and adrenaline rushed into the trooper. Cryogenic and electrical systems activated the revival sequence.

The inhabitant’s index finger twitched. A small droplet of spittle escaped between sharpened teeth to rest on a pale lower lip. The trooper’s chest expanded with its first natural breath in months. It exhaled a fine dust into the cabin, clearing its lungs of the medical detritus used to keep it alive during the journey. Dim eyes began to sharpen, sentience returning.

Closer and closer, the red planet grew larger in the reflection of the pod’s portal window.

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Halotestin......wherever did you acquire that idea?

Good stuff Machine, you have that god awful talent of cutting off right when it looks like there's going to be some action. Suspense I guess they call it.

I, for one, most definatley would like to see this updated as you finish it.

Thanks for posting this for me. I owe you seven pounds of formaldehyde.
 
Satanic Goatslayer said:
Halotestin......wherever did you acquire that idea?

Good stuff Machine, you have that god awful talent of cutting off right when it looks like there's going to be some action. Suspense I guess they call it.

I, for one, most definatley would like to see this updated as you finish it.

Thanks for posting this for me. I owe you seven pounds of formaldehyde.

If I get two or three people interested in seing updates, I will post them... I do have the next segment completed, I could post it next week...

Halotestin? Hmmm... not sure where I got the idea... lol :)

Thanks for showing an interest in seeing it posted. It helps keep the fire under my ass to keep working on it!

Make sure you measure the fomaldehyde in liquid pounds, not dry pounds...
 
Throw in mass murder and I am all for it.

SG, how's it hangin baby.....torture me later?

Star
 
Well come on Machine, where's the rest man??? I was just getting into it when it ended
 
Star said:
Throw in mass murder and I am all for it.

SG, how's it hangin baby.....torture me later?

Star

Star, this is a story, not an MTV video -- you have to wait at least a little while before the death, destruction and mayhem.... :) lol!
 
Frackal said:
Well come on Machine, where's the rest man??? I was just getting into it when it ended

Frack, if I get at least 3 people who definitively want to see additional segments -- and will bust my balls if I slack -- then I will post additional segments at the rate of 1 to 2 per week. I've got most of the second segment already, and will post it early next week if the response is strong enough....
 
Hello, this is Satanic Goatslayer's friend, Toothless East Indian. I really enjoyed your story Machine, and judging with my superior mathematical skills, built from years of counting my teeth falling out, it seems that I make #3 of your supporters.
 
Satanic Goatslayer said:
Hello, this is Satanic Goatslayer's friend, Toothless East Indian. I really enjoyed your story Machine, and judging with my superior mathematical skills, built from years of counting my teeth falling out, it seems that I make #3 of your supporters.

I swear this guy cracks me up!!!:FRlol:
 
68GT350 said:
I'm supporting you Machine. I'm all for aspiring young authors. Keep it up...

Why thank you sir. Not sure if I still qualify as young...but I'll take it...

The best way any of you can support me is by keeping at me for more segments.

And by telling me specifically what you like and don't like....

thx
 
your first draft was a little "wordy". That's my only critique. That and the fact that SG was entertained by it...
 
Very good intro so far. I agree a little wordy but never the less, it kept me interested from the beginning. Very creative, I like it.
 
fantom -- I don't think Blaster has a place in this story, but... one never knows... I'll keep him in mind...

68GT and Kryp -- thanks for the comments. Keep them coming, glad you like it so far...
 
full-scale verbal jihad... nice!

2nd segment tomorrow... :)

Besides, I put the first one out Friday, I have to space them a little...
 
I just saw the thread... if I would have caught this one earlier.. I would have voted.
 
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