why i wanna be a cop.. pls advise

[Elite_Fry]

I’m finally going to hand in my application form to try to get into the force. One of the questions was “Why do you wish to become a Police Officer”. Below is what I have written up and I was hoping you could tell me if it is appropriate. Also if there are any changes you would suggest or additional information I could add. Thanks a lot… btw im 18/m


Being in the academy is something I’ve considered wanting to be involved in for years and gradually over time to the present it has become one of my top priorities and is one of the things I most want to do. I’ve looked into other similar jobs, such as criminology or forensics, but from talking to other officers and workers in those fields, this appeals to me most.

Like I said before, I’ve talked to many officers to see from first hand experience what it’s like and what’s involved and it is something I know I would really enjoy doing. As we know, “A happy worker is a good worker”.

As preparation I’ve been going to the gym for the past year improving my strength and fitness. I’ve started learning the martial art of Aikido “The Art of Peace” and I’ve got the required first aid certificate. Although I’m only on my provisional drivers license I do drive around as much as I can, to improve my driving skills. I have not broken the law before and have a clean record.

Even if I don’t get into the force this time I will keep all this up and try again in the near future. So it isn’t something I will give up on straight away, this is pretty much my dream job and is what I want to do as my career.

 

[Lord_Suston]

but why is the question. Not to be a happy worker. I mean do you feel an urge to help the community and give something back to it? Does it interest you with all the fields it covers? You need to search for the most basic answer to the question and THAT IS WHAT YOU GIVE and RECIEVE, BESIDES GETTING A GUN OR A NICE CAR.

 

[Elite_Fry]

addition


I was unlucky enough to have a relatives life ended because of an unlawful act caused by someone else. I’ve experienced crime before and know how it can affect ones life and family. Upholding the law I know I can prevent such things happening to other families.

Albeit may be small I can make a difference and knowing that I have made a difference will defiantly make me a better person. The uniform means nothing, a cop comes from the heart. If I can protect or change one person, I will have done my part.

 

[Bigsatan13]

Your future!

 

[Elite_Fry]

who's for bacon?

 

[aurelius]

You´re not going to save the world by becoming a cop.

Don´t have any illusions. You´ll just become embittered by your inability to "help" everybody.

 

[Arioch]

Don't forget being treated like crap by the people you are trying to protect.

 

[havoc]

Have you submitted this yet? Your first sentence needs some restructuring, this one here "Being in the academy is something I’ve considered wanting to be involved in for years and gradually over time to the present it has become one of my top priorities and is one of the things I most want to do". Reword that my good man. Also, they could care less about Aikido, the sacred art of peace. Then you wrote "a cop comes from the heart", that sounds juvenile, don't use the word "cop". Lastly you wrote this as well "Although I’m only on my provisional drivers license I do drive around as much as I can, to improve my driving skills". Man, they are going to read that and say "what in the name of Buddah on a moped is this kid smoking?" First, I have little respect for any police officer, there are a "few" who actually represent the job in a proper and moral fashion, very fucking few. You want to become an officer of the law because you believe in the ideals that law enforcement is supposed to represent and uphold (to protect and serve), build your answer along that. peace and good luck!

 

[Peyote Killa]

Have you submitted this yet? Your first sentence needs some restructuring, this one here "Being in the academy is something I’ve considered wanting to be involved in for years and gradually over time to the present it has become one of my top priorities and is one of the things I most want to do". Reword that my good man. Also, they could care less about Aikido, the sacred art of peace. Then you wrote "a cop comes from the heart", that sounds juvenile, don't use the word "cop". Lastly you wrote this as well "Although I’m only on my provisional drivers license I do drive around as much as I can, to improve my driving skills". Man, they are going to read that and say "what in the name of Buddah on a moped is this kid smoking?" First, I have little respect for any police officer, there are a "few" who actually represent the job in a proper and moral fashion, very fucking few. You want to become an officer of the law because you believe in the ideals that law enforcement is supposed to represent and uphold (to protect and serve), build your answer along that. peace and good luck!

Spoken like a genius. Follow this advice and you will be better off.

 

[Kahn]

Have you submitted this yet? Your first sentence needs some restructuring, this one here "Being in the academy is something I’ve considered wanting to be involved in for years and gradually over time to the present it has become one of my top priorities and is one of the things I most want to do". Reword that my good man. Also, they could care less about Aikido, the sacred art of peace. Then you wrote "a cop comes from the heart", that sounds juvenile, don't use the word "cop". Lastly you wrote this as well "Although I’m only on my provisional drivers license I do drive around as much as I can, to improve my driving skills". Man, they are going to read that and say "what in the name of Buddah on a moped is this kid smoking?" First, I have little respect for any police officer, there are a "few" who actually represent the job in a proper and moral fashion, very fucking few. You want to become an officer of the law because you believe in the ideals that law enforcement is supposed to represent and uphold (to protect and serve), build your answer along that. peace and good luck!

Havoc said what I was going to. The first sentence is a run on. Some of your info is kiddy info that shows your greenness in life(no flame). I'd go with the explanation of what happened to the family member and how it effected you and how you want to try to keep it from happening to others. Then don the batsuit and chase crime.

 

[manny78]

I’m finally going to hand in my application form to try to get into the force. One of the questions was “Why do you wish to become a Police Officer”. Below is what I have written up and I was hoping you could tell me if it is appropriate. Also if there are any changes you would suggest or additional information I could add. Thanks a lot… btw im 18/m


Being in the academy is something I’ve considered wanting to be involved in for years and gradually over time to the present it has become one of my top priorities and is one of the things I most want to do. I’ve looked into other similar jobs, such as criminology or forensics, but from talking to other officers and workers in those fields, this appeals to me most.

Like I said before, I’ve talked to many officers to see from first hand experience what it’s like and what’s involved and it is something I know I would really enjoy doing. As we know, “A happy worker is a good worker”.

As preparation I’ve been going to the gym for the past year improving my strength and fitness. I’ve started learning the martial art of Aikido “The Art of Peace” and I’ve got the required first aid certificate. Although I’m only on my provisional drivers license I do drive around as much as I can, to improve my driving skills. I have not broken the law before and have a clean record.

Even if I don’t get into the force this time I will keep all this up and try again in the near future. So it isn’t something I will give up on straight away, this is pretty much my dream job and is what I want to do as my career.

Bro dont waste your time with this BS. It wont change anything. I know what I'm talking about. Instead get prepared for the interview. Believe me they wont give a fuck about this BS. Bro spend some time learning martial arts, go the shooting range, get a degree if you can. Bottom line, you need to place yourself in the best position possible. No offence bro, but you dont look ready for that., Sorry if the truth hurts.

 

[theoak01]

get that ball itch in control first

 

[dimitrios]

Learn how to eat Dough Nuts or is that Dog Nuts??

 

[manny78]

Learn how to eat Dough Nuts or is that Dog Nuts??

you're funny if you only knew why they go there.......

 

[Y_lifter]

Buddah on a moped ....

bwahahahaha

 

[dimitrios]

you're funny if you only knew why they go there.......

OK, why do they go there?? Is it for free coffee and dough nuts??

 

[Y_lifter]

You will have a better chance if you are serious by going to School
and getting a degree in Criminal Justice.
Or cheaper, join the military and request MP training. Right now they are looking for all the guards they can train.

That would be my choice of the path to go...
3 years in the Mil, a clean record/discharge and you are practically gauranteed a job in Law Enforcement

 

[manny78]

OK, why do they go there?? Is it for free coffee and dough nuts??

Mostly for 2 reasons:

1- Cause in those places (at least here in Montreal) you will usually find all kind of jerks, mentally disturbed people laming.....

2- Also cause Dunkin Donuts (call them....) is open 24/24 so they will pay a visit in order to be sure the employee are ok and nothing wrong is going on. God knows DK is dangerous at nite....

 

[dimitrios]

Mostly for 2 reasons:

1- Cause in those places (at least here in Montreal) you will usually find all kind of jerks, mentally disturbed people laming.....

2- Also cause Dunkin Donuts (call them....) is open 24/24 so they will pay a visit in order to be sure the employee are ok and nothing wrong is going on. God knows DK is dangerous at nite....

Yeah, OK

 

[manny78]

Yeah, OK

Bro think about it. Donuts are shit, same with the coffee there. SO why would they go there ?

 

[dimitrios]

Bro think about it. Donuts are shit, same with the coffee there. SO why would they go there ?

I would have to say that it is a place to sit rather then driving around doing what they are supposed to be doing and again for the "FREE" Dough Nuts and coffee

 

[manny78]

I would have to say that it is a place to sit rather then driving around doing what they are supposed to be doing and again for the "FREE" Dough Nuts and coffee

Never heard about free coffee.....seriously bro

 

[dimitrios]

Never heard about free coffee.....seriously bro

Same thing with the coffee at the local 7/11. I have alot of buddies that are officers and they tell me where they go to get free things, I feel they should not get special treatment but it's not my store.

 

[Elite_Fry]

get that ball itch in control first

i got some cream to help control the itch. its working. but still itches at times

 

[theoak01]

i got some cream to help control the itch. its working. but still itches at times

good to hear bro ,good to hear

 

[havoc]

Manny 78 - man, you were obviously freebasing Elmers glue yesterday, and in abnormal amounts, your reasons why cops go to Dunkin Doughnuts are ridiculously funny.

 

[ccc]

I agree with havoc about cops being assholes. Most of them are guys from the military that dont have any real skills, so they are left with nothing but being a cop. I see allot of our city's cops working out at my gym, and I must say they are all a bunch of pussys. Also, what is the deal with those "get out of a ticket cards" they give there friends and family members. Why is that legal, not to mention unethical.. There real job is to generate revenue for the city not protect and serve.

 

[casavant]

You do need to focus more on why you actually want to be a cop. And have someone with a knack for English proof read it for you. It's clumsy right now- it just doesn't flow right. Good luck.

 

[manny78]

Manny 78 - man, you were obviously freebasing Elmers glue yesterday, and in abnormal amounts, your reasons why cops go to Dunkin Doughnuts are ridiculously funny.

Maybe funny, but I know that its true for 80% of them. Not every Donut resto can afford private security like those McDonalds do here (those open 24/24).

 

[manny78]

I agree with havoc about cops being assholes. Most of them are guys from the military that dont have any real skills, so they are left with nothing but being a cop. I see allot of our city's cops working out at my gym, and I must say they are all a bunch of pussys. Also, what is the deal with those "get out of a ticket cards" they give there friends and family members. Why is that legal, not to mention unethical.. There real job is to generate revenue for the city not protect and serve.

I cant agree with you. Here to become a cop for the mucicipal or Provincial service you need either to have a Police Tech. or a degree in law or criminology (that will push as an investigator). As for the RCMP, it doesnt really matter as long as your 19, but the more you have on hands the better your chances to get something good. Military guys are not what they're looking for. Mostly cause of their attitude. Plus many of them are outta shape.

 

[Elite_Fry]

Is this an improvment??



Although I’ve wanted to be in the police force for a few years, it wasn’t until about six months when I started seriously considering the job as a hopeful career path. However it now has pretty much become my ideal job.

I want to become an officer of the law because I believe in the ideals that law enforcement is supposed to represent and uphold, which is to protect and serve. Albeit may be small I can make a difference.

Recently I was informed of an incident concerning my family which really gave me a better understanding of a number of problems in our society. Unfortunately as bad as it may sound the police are the only ones who can resolve these problems. Just to extend on what happened, I was unlucky enough to have a relatives life ended because of an unlawful act caused by someone else. So I have experienced crime and can see how it can affect ones life and family. With upholding the law I know I can prevent such things happening to other families and saving the heartache while may occur.

 

[casavant]

Is this an improvment??



Although I’ve wanted to be in the police force for a few years, it wasn’t until about six months when I started seriously considering the job as a hopeful career path. However it now has pretty much become my ideal job.

I want to become an officer of the law because I believe in the ideals that law enforcement is supposed to represent and uphold, which is to protect and serve. Albeit may be small I can make a difference.

Recently I was informed of an incident concerning my family which really gave me a better understanding of a number of problems in our society. Unfortunately as bad as it may sound the police are the only ones who can resolve these problems. Just to extend on what happened, I was unlucky enough to have a relatives life ended because of an unlawful act caused by someone else. So I have experienced crime and can see how it can affect ones life and family. With upholding the law I know I can prevent such things happening to other families and saving the heartache while may occur.

Altough much better than the first one, it's still not a finished product. A couple of suggestions:
1) Do something with paragraph two. It's kind of just hanging there awkwardly.
2) I would leave out things like "pretty much" and "hopeful"- too wishy-washy. Sound more confident.
3) Instead of "extend" use something like "expound", or redo the sentence entirely.
4) Don't begin a sentence with "So"
5) Scratch that last sentence- read it aloud to yourself and you'll see what I'm saying. Here's an example of one that may work a little better: " A career as a police officer would allow me to prevent such things from happening to other families, thus saving them the heartache which may occur."

One more thought- Might the experience with your relative give them the impression that you would take the job too personally?

I can tell you're trying. Keep working at it and you'll get there. Good luck.

 

[Elite_Fry]

with that
heartache while may occur.
i mean
heartache which may occur.

that first one was actually my first draft

 

[havoc]

Manny, thats ridiculous, you're my dawg and all, but thats a bunch of poopity poop. peace homes

 

[casavant]

with that
heartache while may occur.
i mean
heartache which may occur.

that first one was actually my first draft

That's fine. Remember, I'm not knocking your stuff, just offering constructive criticism. It's 7:30 am over here and I'm taking the time to help you.

You're welcome.