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++++ATBG/Segment 5 -- Beneath The Ice++++

THeMaCHinE

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This week's segment -- let me know what you think!

Past Segments:

ATBG/Segment 1 — Blackness and Light

ATBG/Segment 2 — The Descent

ATBG/Segment 3 — Calm Before The Storm

ATBG/Segment 4 — The Quickening

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And There Be Gods
Segment 5 -- Beneath The Ice
by MACHINE
© 2001
All Rights Reserved

7.

In the opulent surroundings of his private quarters, the man slumped at his desk and wiped a bead of crystalline sweat from his brow with an unsteady hand. A fragile chalice of chilled mead sat untouched, sweating in the oppressive environment of the dim, closed-in chamber. The man stared blankly at the small object on the desk before him, his mind alternating between angry internal dialogue and somber reflection.

Greed. Money. Power.

After long and torturous months of watching, waiting and worrying, the palm-sized transmitter’s single green light had metamorphasized from intermittent blinks to a lethal and steady glow.

It was done. At least one trooper had arrived. Maybe more.

When the shadowy agent had approached him all those months ago, the money versus the risk had seemed worth it. Having been a navigator for years prior, he had never dreamed that pods of the size the Xian agent had described would survive such a long journey. He had never dreamed that the easy money the agent had paid, and was yet to pay, would be blood money.

Dread rising; a surreal feeling of detachment falling over him, he succumbed with a whisper to the grip of the desk’s immaculate leather chair. What had he done?

Propping his elbows roughly on the desk’s expansive wooden surface and cradling his spinning head in strong, calloused hands, he stared at the small, dull-black transmitter through interlocked fingers. It occurred to him that the device resembled the upper segment of a venomous black snake.

A snake that had guided the poisonous shock trooper to Ibiza.

Hitching forward and snatching up the transmitter, he turned it over and unhinged a hidden door on its back, gaining access to a nondescript recessed switch.

Flicking the switch and dropping the device into his trash container, the man lingered long enough to watch the transmitter smoke lightly, melt and devolve into an undistinguishable black slag. An acrid smell filled the room as metal and plastic components became unrecognizable.

Feeling a sudden and urgent physical need to be out of the apartment, the man left.

And paced the pristine, hallowed halls of the Ibizan palace.

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hehe...well this is the first one of these posts that I have seen.....luckily you also included links to the prior editions of this story..keep em coming man....its awesome..you have alot of talent bro :D


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Wodin -- thanks for reading, I'm glad you're into it!

Mastermind -- Welcome aboard, I appreciate your comments. I hope you have time to go back and read from the 1st segment...
 
Alright goddamnit you've got to make these segments longer machine! It is going really well!
 
Machine, good job. Each segment you are building keeps getting better and better. Thanks for posting this - it's truly enjoyable.
 
I'm quite enjoying these. You have a knack for illustrating surroundings and action.

I'm wondering why you chose the name "Ibiza"?

I going to have a pm ready to send to you either today or tomorrow, Machine.

Again, nice work. I look forward to the next.
 
Frackal said:
Alright goddamnit you've got to make these segments longer machine! It is going really well!

:) lol -- I'm more concerned about quality than quantity... I try to average about 500 words per segment, this one was a little on the short side... I just gotta let the story tell itself though, you know? Glad you are enjoying it!
 
Annihilator99 said:
Machine, good job. Each segment you are building keeps getting better and better. Thanks for posting this - it's truly enjoyable.

Thanks! And thanks for the PM you sent me... I sent you a reply...
 
Satanic Goatslayer said:
I'm quite enjoying these. You have a knack for illustrating surroundings and action.

I'm wondering why you chose the name "Ibiza"?

I going to have a pm ready to send to you either today or tomorrow, Machine.

Again, nice work. I look forward to the next.

Thanks SGS -- I've experimented with different styles, but on this one, I am just letting it have its own voice, I'm glad you're enjoying them, and again, I thank you for prompting me to post the segs in the first place... are you still working on the piece you were going to edit, etc?

Ibiza, Ibiza, Ibiza -- too convoluted of an explanation, and probably meaningless to anyone aside from myself...

I'm working on the next seg now...
 
It's great to see you addressing this from different locations as to not hit an apex to early. This keeps the intrigue. Now you've established interest in yet another segment of the story. Keep writing Machine. =)
 
Kryp2o said:
It's great to see you addressing this from different locations as to not hit an apex to early. This keeps the intrigue. Now you've established interest in yet another segment of the story. Keep writing Machine. =)

Glad it's keeping your interest... In my mind, this is definitely a multidimensional story -- I hope to be able to do it justice... I'll keep writing if you guys keep reading...
 
To write i multi-dimensional story such as this takes raw talent, as it is extremely difficult to keep track and keep your mind moving the story along. It seems to flow from you easily Machine. Once again, you've made my day.
 
68GT350 said:
To write i multi-dimensional story such as this takes raw talent, as it is extremely difficult to keep track and keep your mind moving the story along. It seems to flow from you easily Machine. Once again, you've made my day.

Thanks for the kind words -- there are a lot of elements and it does take a little bit to keep the pace and plot going the right direction. I'm glad it doesn't appear strained to you...thanks for reading!
 
Fucking bump.

This man, the MACHINE, write the greatest stories I've ever read. I know that a shameless bump does nothing, but this man is a great guy. Take some time to read and comprehend his words, truely a tremendous story teller.

There is five or so people that I consider to be stand-up internet personas. I won't name them, as to do so would leave much resentment; but MACHINE is really a wise and much under(I hate hyphens)appreciated talent.

Sorry, my friend, I know praise is a hard thing to take, but take a bow - your writing and humbleness(?) gets my respect regardless.

War out,

Satanic Goatslayer
 
Thanks for the bumps guys -- that's way cool; guess I better get off my ass and finish the next seg eh?

SG -- Wow! I don't know what to say! Thanks for the sincere compliments, they really mean a lot!
 
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