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++++ATBG/Segment 4 -- The Quickening++++

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Past Segments:

ATBG/Segment 1 — Blackness and Light
ATBG/Segment 2 — The Descent
ATBG/Segment 3 — Calm Before The Storm

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And There Be Gods
Segment 4 -- The Quickening
By MACHINE
© 2001
All Rights Reserved


5.

50 feet. An outdoor regional meeting.

He could see the looks on their faces.

Stupid ants.

Slowing to a near hover, the shock trooper jettisoned the armor’s single, 50-pound cluster/EMF bomb into the night from an oblong slot in the suit’s back.

Dropping like a tear from the early evening sky, the pristine ovular cylinder turned end-over-end, falling soundlessly toward Ibiza’s central square — a few of those assembled below saw the trooper coming and tried to run. Most didn't. No chance for any of them.

The Xian battle hymn blared over the armor’s audio system, heavy drum beats battering their way to a climactic crescendo.

The cluster bomb triggered at 20 feet, spreading lethal bomblets over a 30-foot radius. The mini-bombs ignited at 15 feet, raining razor-like shrapnel and wet chemical fire over a solid 60-foot radius. A heavy concussion wave rocked the park-like setting.

Cacophony, screams and panic — ancient trees combusting, the wash of orange fire flowing over and igniting spasmodically flailing bodies; human figures launched skyward like misfit angels. The shock wave knocking appendages, flesh and articles of clothing free from their places in a deafening roar. The smell of burning wood, charred plastic, fried ozone and twisted metal.

Death. En masse.

Turning night into day, a phoenix-like finger of fire rose 60 feet into the evening sky, washing over the trooper like the caress of a sadistic lover. The trooper guided the heavy battle armor down through the center of the fire, hiding amongst the shifting flames.

In the blink of an eye, 487 Ibizans in the crowded city square lost their lives. Dozens more were maimed and injured. The wailing of the wounded began. For 100 feet, all electronic-based equipment went dead as a result of the EMF wave coupled with the explosion. The heavy assault rifles and armored vehicles of the surviving two-dozen city police officers at the assembly became useless, their internal components melting under the EMF onslaught. Oily tendrils of acrid smoke began to roll from the site, stinging the survivor’s eyes and nostrils.

Touching down at ground zero, in the hellish crater that moments before been a platform on which one of Ibiza’s regional overlords had been holding council with his constituents and cabinet, the trooper began to climb out of the seven-foot deep indentation amidst the flickering flames.

Helpless citizens and police watched in visceral terror as the giant armored demon’s shadow became increasingly solid, plodding methodically towards them through the fiery curtain’s veil.



6.

ETA: 3 minutes.

Aided by small red bursts from the Shoggoth suit’s thrusters, Garden bounded in great mechanical leaps across the city’s roof towards the general vicinity of the projected impact site. The armor’s central power stalk connected to his form via a spidery assembly of pulsating organic head, neck, arm and leg fittings. Inside the suit, thin living tubes snaked wetly into the crevices of Garden’s nostrils and mouth, carefully monitoring the Baron’s internal processes and supplying ideal mixtures of air, fluids and hormones to the Ibizan ruler.

With the fluidity of a half-seen shadow, Garden navigated gold-encrusted building domes, dodged spiky communication towers, touched down on narrow ledges and leapt across sprawling urban chasms.

He was one with the Shoggoth. Both man and machine.

37 generations of Ibizan royalty comprised the living elements of the ancient, space- and war-tested armor. Part low-tech mechanized armor, part sentient living creature, the rippling muscles and organic components of the biomechanical Imperial battle suit were encased in overlaid sheets of rare, dead-planet Trillian alloy. One day, after their souls had ascended to the Watchers womb, the physical remains and stored memories of Garden’s household would join the armor in cybernetic nirvana.

Though under Garden’s control, the armor shone with a warm prescience that helped guide and sharpen his actions. Hundreds of years of instinct from Ibizan warriors, renegades, scholars, kings and queens honed his steps and whispered in his ears.

Through the slotted visage of the heavy crimson suit’s horned helmet, Garden observed a sharp explosion and pop of smoke on the horizon. The Central Sector. Redoubling his efforts, Garden propelled the Shoggoth toward the flames in the distance.

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Fantastic! Great turn of events. I expected it to be another "human race vs. extra terrestrial" book. It sounds like it's going to be a mix between a sci-fi and japanese anime bio armor suit story. A cool mix.

Your literary style never ceases to amaze me! Keep it up!
 
Good job my friend........ the story is very good.... I think the next chapter is when Blaster shall make his debut........... hee hee Seriously though I like it a lot.........
 
Alright I'm back. First of all I love how you went into detail with the Shock Trooper's armor and Garden's Shoggoth suit instead of just referencing that they exist but with what purpose.

Everything is describe with great detail in such a short amount of space so you get a concise visual of the moment at hand without any gaps in the story line.

Every chapter seems to be tieing in very well once again without major gaps in the story line.

I like the Shock Trooper's use of the flames as camouflage for part of his decent into Ibiza.

Great detail about Garden and the Shoggoth suit making the suit seem part organic in design for seamless interaction almost like neither one is controlling the other, but both suit and man doing there part to work effortlessly as one unit.

Looks like were getting close to a showdown between the Shock Trooper and Garden. Can't wait till next week already.

Great Work !!!
 
Dude! Excellent job. You get better and better each time - this one is excellent! More please!

Wonderful use of names, and you cut down on the wordiness on this one. You are coming a long way bro. Keep it up.
 
Nothing like a good story to get lost in. Your style is amazing bro. Excellent flow through the story line and it is a damn cool story line. I like how you blend in the archtypes of our societies in the story line to bring about a sense of mysticism. Keep it up!!!
 
Thanks to all for your comments! Kryp20 thanks for the breakdown of the different elements from your perspective. I'm glad that you all seem to enjoy where it is going... guess I better get cracking on the next segment eh?
 
mrbill said:
Machine...nice writing, btw did you get inspiration for this story from the Book "Armor" by John Steakley??

Loved Armor. Loved Starship Troopers too. Like those books, my guys make use of battle armor, but the story lines, cast of characters, settings, mythos, etc. are completely different (as are the armor types).

The inspiration for this story started from a much, much older source -- and evolved into something else from there...
 
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