... With A Commanding Thunder....karma 3000

[BrothaBill]

...he slammed his hands to the table. "Not again." said the detective

no wait, said the inspector

"What for?" Hamdan, the detective knew the response he would get. A terse look by the braguidoushe inspector.

"Another one?"





ok, help me out from here, its late, lets make it interesting, chapter 1, page one
FINISH IT, I have writer's block, finish the hook for me, then Ill take care the rest, k for you

 

[BUBBLES]

The Inspector then leaps through the window and cuts off the Detective's head with a yataghan. [A yataghan is a Turkish scimitar with a double curved blade.] [The Detective was really an imposter]

 

[BrothaBill]

The Inspector then leaps through the window and cuts off the Detective's head with a yataghan. [A yataghan is a Turkish scimitar with a double curved blade.] [The Detective was really an imposter]

No, no, no, the Inspector is British and the detective is from New York, they are friends

 

[BUBBLES]

Oh ...well I give up.

 

[Yarg!]

...he slammed his hands to the table. "Not again." said the detective

no wait, said the inspector

"What for?" Hamdan, the detective knew the response he would get. A terse look by the braguidoushe inspector.

"Another one?"

"Very well." Sighed the detective. He reached into his trench coat and slowly pulled out a large frozen banana.

"I have been a bad boy." Said the inspector.

"Indeed you have. You have been a very bad boy." The detective licked his moist lips as beads of sweat formed over his brow.

"I like it when you talk dirty" Giggled the inspector.



ok, help me out from here, its late, lets make it interesting, chapter 1, page one
FINISH IT,

Theres my take.

 

[chewyxrage]

Morimoto is not easily surprised, but the dead man's coin locker is just the first of several surprises that Morimoto encounters in this case. Furthermore, Morimoto is puzzled because he cannot find the dead man's umbrella, and he also wants to know why Special Branch from Tokyo is investigating the dead man's company. Moreover, why does the waitress at the Bamboo Haven restaurant provide a different explanation each time they meet, and is there any connection with the baseball game that took place in the Osaka Dome?




Everything points to an assassination by the criminal syndicates, but Morimoto and Suzuki are not convinced. Using her powers of deductive reasoning, Suzuki helps Morimoto develop a hypothesis that involves espionage, secretive trips on the bullet train, deception, and double deception.



Don't you motherfuckin' forget the double deception.

 

[BrothaBill]

Morimoto is not easily surprised, but the dead man's coin locker is just the first of several surprises that Morimoto encounters in this case. Furthermore, Morimoto is puzzled because he cannot find the dead man's umbrella, and he also wants to know why Special Branch from Tokyo is investigating the dead man's company. Moreover, why does the waitress at the Bamboo Haven restaurant provide a different explanation each time they meet, and is there any connection with the baseball game that took place in the Osaka Dome?




Everything points to an assassination by the criminal syndicates, but Morimoto and Suzuki are not convinced. Using her powers of deductive reasoning, Suzuki helps Morimoto develop a hypothesis that involves espionage, secretive trips on the bullet train, deception, and double deception.



Don't you motherfuckin' forget the double deception.

Nice, although it has not yet been checked to see if it is original prose. Im looking for someone more in tune with at least the names of the characters and their nationalities given they were among the limited number of variables in the opening statement. But I appreciate your work as an artist, soon this day shall pass and if little more exciting than yours comes, the massive 3k log is coming your way